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  1. I'm running out of words for you, I swear. Just everything you write, it's beautiful. How boring it must be for you when I repeat myself so much!

    I love this sort of early-days, sweet, secretive little thing they have. I love that I don't know exactly what it is, or how far it's gone. It just all seems so innocent and lovely, both just overwhelmed with it in their own ways. I love the details about the room they're sharing; I love how you've incorporated Jer's mechanical brain; and I love love Dean changing the words of the songs, not least because that's exactly what he was like.

    Some favourites:

    "Dean had gazed off somewhere over Jerry’s left shoulder as he gave it to him, and muttered something about making the place more homey." - Ugh, how he can't quite commit to giving a gift like that at this point (and the contrast with how he's bringing him a gift at the end!). And of course, the fact that he's nicked them is so perfect.
    "writing in his notebook and occasionally sneaking a peek at Dean." - Oh. Oh, Jer :') The boy has it bad!
    "Jerry adores him. Nobody’s ever. Nobody has ever…" - I love the idea that it isn't just that Jer loves Dean so much that he's so overwhelmed, but also because Dean's showing it this way; Jerry's overwhelmed that anyone would want to do something so nice for him.
    "the beautiful boy perched at the end of the counter with [...] a notebook full of hearts" - I don't know what it is about Jer scrawling hearts in his notebook, but it's adorable. And... I don't know, I get this idea, that maybe because it's so early in whatever their relationship is at this point in this version of the boys, he's maybe not quite able to be as open with Dean as he wants to be - or maybe Dean isn't quite ready for that - so instead of saying it out loud all the time, he's putting it down like this; every time he needs to say it, he draws another heart. I am for sure reading too much into this, but that's how it made me feel.

    Oh, I'm so overwhelmed. I might have to stop here now. BUT know that I love this so much.
    Apologies again if there are any typos.
    I've still got so much to comment on!
    Anyway, this is perfect. I love it.

    Thanks so much for writing and sharing it <3

    P.S. I'm so sorry it's taking me this long. I'll get there, I promise :)

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    1. Your comments are NEVER boring, don't even begin to think that! <3 You always have such interesting things to say and I love reading them.

      I couldn't figure out quite what their relationship is or what stage it's at in this one either, so I thought it would be nice to leave it a bit unclear, and I'm glad you liked that about it. I had a lovely time changing the song lyrics for Dean too, so I'm really pleased you enjoyed them.

      I really like the idea of Dean having to show how he feels rather than saying it, and I do think you're right that that would have this slightly restraining effect on Jerry - he doesn't want to scare Dean with his enthusiasm. I LOVE your idea that every time Jerry needs to tell Dean he loves him he draws a heart, I hadn't thought of it as being that structured but it's such a beautiful idea.

      Thank you as always for taking the trouble to leave such a lovely, thoughtful comment. It really means the world to me, thank you very much. <3 <3 < 3 <3

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