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  1. booty booty booty

    oh my god ive spent the past thirty minutes thinking of ways this could go

    john shows up at dave's house with flowers, sees how happy karkat makes dave, and leaves them be, hiding the flowers behind his back. he doesn't talk to dave like he used to after that, and basically spends his time at home dealing with double heartbreak. dave comes over one day out of the blue because john won't answer any of his calls or reply any of his messages, and john sighs and tells him everything. how karkat broke his heart, how he fell in love with dave. how he was willing to leave them be because he understood that karkat made dave happier than john could ever. and that he was basically cool with them dating and would be okay after a while maybe. dave feels horrible. how couldn't he have noticed? still, he lets john be, and turns to leave. he's at the door when john kisses him once on the lips, firmly, before sadly bidding him goodbye.

    john doesn't get over dave. just loves him from afar, praying that karkat doesn't hurt him.

    1) years pass. karkat proposes. dave accepts. john's the best man. it's bachelor night and john takes dave for a night on the town. they both get wasted and sleep together and it's better than anything dave could ever have imagined.

    2) years pass. dave and karkat get married, john leaves immediately after the ceremony without so much as a word to either of them. he disappears without a trace. moves to L.A. and starts up his acting career. gets rich and famous. one dark, stormy night a few years later, dave shows up at john's house and says about four words before he's sobbing in john's arms.

    "he cheated on me."

    3) dave begins having serious second thoughts about dating karkat after what he did to john, and his mind is riddled with 'what-ifs' and 'maybes' about john, and he falls out of love with karkat, who is still into him, and falls in love with john.

    i have so many more. now THIS is a real love triangle, oh man.

    Last Edited Sat 23 May 2015 06:51AM EDT

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    1. Well, maybe, Karkat would have learned his lesson about cheating! I like how there's a wedding already, haha. Maybe John would steal Dave from him? Karma? Maybe John and Karkat would fight over Dave just to realize he's in love with someone else (but, oh god, let it not be Jade), and they'll get back together? Anyways, my OTP is Dave/Karkat, but I love Dave/John too. I just hope there's a good ending for all parties involved! And I have to say that, quoting from you, "now THIS is a real love triangle, oh man."

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      1. booty booty booty

        gay marriages are so important pls

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        1. KittieStrider

          I remember strongly thinking about having a marriage in the writing later down the lines, but I haven't read nor touched this in nearly a year.. Hm.

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      2. KittieStrider

        If you're talking about DaveJade, don't worry. That ship honestly triggers me to extremes so it won't be happening in ANY of my writings. <3

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    2. KittieStrider

      If, and IF, I ever update this again, I will be sure to take your ways into consideration. I'll probably end up going through and editing and revising and making the story seem WAY better, since this was written before I started learning how to write better.

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