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  1. Hello Sindarina! How lovely to receive another fic from you!

    Firstly, I have a great love for h/c and stories set in hotel rooms in the company of an injured friend. That, to me, is a perfect scenario and full of promise, so you have won me over already! :)

    "Here. Drink."

    "You're pretty bossy", he said, pretending to be indignant.

    "I have to, so that you obey", I explained, but with a smile.

    This rang so true, I could hear Chris speaking here and see his tiny smile (which is always a pleasure to see!) And Vin's pretended indignation about Chris being bossy felt just like him I particularly liked the: “You're pretty bossy!” It was so Vin! (and I'll bet it was accompanied by that very attractive lop-sided grin of his too!)

    Having grown up with the modern American Brer Rabbit I was not familiar with the fact that the version with Compère Lapin and Compère Bouki even existed so thanks very much for making me aware of that as I never did look into that as an adult.

    It was great to hear the tale again and I think it was a really good decision to opt for Compère as that made the relevance to our seven and their own story all the more meaningful.

    Loved this: "If you need me. Here, I mean." It seemed strange to say it out. It was true though. ..” The “Here, I mean..” was so telling! :)

    Oh, and this (yummy)

    “I got a bit more comfortable. And was momentarily distracted when he laid a hand on my foot. Unexpectedly pleasant. Warm..”

    Vin's comment on Rabbit being resourceful was very observant (and amusing)

    and..

    "No. Why not stay?“

    I broke away cautiously and opened at least the window before I settled with him again.

    It was true. Actually … I didn't want to leave at all.”

    I think this piece is lovely. Chris's consideration – even giving up his own pillow! - Vin's always droll sense of humour and his obvious but unspoken appreciation of Chris' attentions to him. And that growing closeness that he has needed, something that both of them have needed (IMO) for a very long time. And of course, Chris' sharing of the tale served to strengthen the connection between them (which is, of course, what we want and need to see!)

    Lastly, I am hereby submitting my written application to have a bed time story read to me by Chris. What a treat that would be! ..Do you think he might agree to it? (I think not!)

    So, THANK you once again for writing and sharing!

    And thanks again to both of you for all that you went through in order to complete the translation!

    A big thank you hug!! XX
    ♥ ♥ ♥

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    1. Aaaaaw, I made a wrong click, and my answer to you disappeared, and it was a long one ... Try again now :)

      So glad you enjoyed this piece!! It is the counterpart of Mirna's "Bedside Manner". She set up a mini challenge for the two of us, with the only specification that Vin is sick and Chris tells a story (and it's an interesting coincidence that you knew both of the stories before^^).

      It'a always encouraging to hear that "my" Chris and Vin are IC. They tend to be wordier than in the film, but here, it felt right to limit their dialogue to the basics. It doesn't take away any of the closeness <3

      Before this story, I didn't know Brer Rabbit or Compère Lapin *blush* I was just looking on the internet for a Cajun fairy tale that would be long enough, and mostly bright. So I chose this one, and didn't take the legend about children who died unchristened and therefore haunted the Bayous at night, making boats turn over XD

      I'm happy that you share my decision for sticking to "Compère". It surely stands out a bit in the English text (as it did in the German one), but as you say, it shows the relevance to the seven, and as Chris is francophone, it might also be natural for him to leave it so.

      Yes, the "Here, I mean." was some kind of lifeline to make it sound less kitschy ;) But the meaning behind it remains (and all the better!).

      I also enjoyed writing this scene with the touch. It might be just innocent, showing the need of some comfort, because one isn't well. But it might also mean that he's starting to claim Chris for himself <3 Either way, it does them good.

      It's a children's tale, and I was thinking about what an adult could learn from it. Rabbit being resourceful is certainly part of it^^

      So good to hear you also like the ending! Also, because "Why not stay?" wasn't easy to translate. In German, it was a statement, with the request softened by a particle, so there was no direct translation ...

      Yes, I wanted to convey ALL of that, and I agree. They both need that closeness and they really absorb all of the attentions and interactions. They haven't yet "officially" decided how it will go on, but they feel in their guts that it would be right to move on together <3
      (I think Chris will take back his pillow for the night, though. Otherwise, he would have to look for a substitute, like ... sleeping in Vin's lap^^ And that would be no. At least, not yet).

      Do you know Harry Potter? If you drank some Polyjuice Potion, you could take the shape of Vin for an hour or so, and you'd be more likely to have your bed time story. (I'd like that, too. I like his voice).

      You're welcome!! :)) To be precise, I asked Mirna a few questions (without throwing the whole text at her^^), and after the upload, she had the kindness to point out other things in an email, which I corrected yesterday. So if you find some things changed, those are additional improvements. I hug you, too! Have a nice day <3

      Last Edited Sun 14 Jun 2020 05:11AM EDT

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      1. What a lovely long response to my comments! I'm glad you enjoyed them.

        Yes, I love Harry Potter and agree that some Polyjuice Potion could definitely be put to good use in that manner! :) (Have always loved Yul's voice..)

        I hope you have a lovely day too! :) ...and thanks again! XX (andanotherhug!)

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        1. Lovely long comments deserve just such responses :)

          Yes, his voice really was/is something. Luckily, you can still listen to interviews (in English and in French). This is my favourite one, I think: https://www.youtube.co/watch?v=JbgHDF10CF8

          I'm glad I got to know you and it's a pleasure sharing my fics with you <3

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